Children are the main part of our life , whose behaviour and discipline are pivotal for society. It is argued that parents and teachers control children's behaviour in a strict way,while others think that they need freedom to do their work. Personally, I believe that controlling is the best method,reasins and examples related to this will be given below.
Firstly, negative issues of society stem from allowing children to do their job freely. Freedom of children can lead them to various ways,namely,addicting to narcotics, joining unnecessary clubs and discos. Take teenagers as an example,some of them are bad-tempered and do not want to be controlled by their parents and teachers. If children were given an opportunity to do what they want, they would adjust their behaviour easily and try something which they had never done before, such as drugs and entertainments. Hence taking freedom provokes their negative reactions.
Secondly,being under control is one of the keys of achievements in children's life. Parents are always worried about their daughters and sons' future. They make them be a well-educated person . For instance, majority of heads of governments were brought uo by a strict father or teacher. They thank them with pleasure ,thus their strictness induced them to gain success in their life.
In my mind, controlling is not only observing or watching the discipline. Furthermore,it is a close relationship between teachers and students, parents and kids. It is a fact that talking with a child is also a method of control in order to evolve a good relationship, Checking the mibile phones,chats and different friends strictly encourages children to speak about these issues, at this time a close relationship strengthens steadily and covers positive attitude between a supervisor and a student,a parent and a child.
To sum up,the important part of our life is children. Although giving freedom is a chance of doing anything, controlling by parents and teachers has some ways of achieving success and good relationships. So I reckon that the method of controlling leads children to be a successful person in their life.
Essay evaluation report
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, i reckon, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21264367816 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07758718108 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8670282096 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4736842105 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3157894737 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212308201804 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675069174062 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459827913015 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129475694637 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495028890374 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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