The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985-2015.

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The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985-2015.

The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying at university from 1985-2015.

The graph shows information about IT at university in 1985 female students studying very less than man students. woman pupils were only around 1000 and male students were more than female pupils.they were around 5000. After that in 1990 they both only increased. In 1997 year they equaled. Then female pupils grew than man students. In 2006 they both were around 27000.

so in 2010 woman students was increased and they were 33000. but man pupils was around 34000. Sure male students were so much more than woman pupils. In 2015 man pupils were around 40000 and female students were 27000. The graph shows in 2015 female didn't grow

In conclusion female pupils didn't grow and feom 1985 to 2010 male and woman students grew. but the graph shows that from 2010 female students decreased. I tend to think that in the future the number of woman students increase. Although we don't have information in 2019.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Woman
...s studying very less than man students. woman pupils were only around 1000 and male s...
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...an female pupils.they were around 5000. After that in 1990 they both only increased. ...
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Suggestion: So
... 2006 they both were around 27000. so in 2010 woman students was increased an...
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Suggestion: But
...ents was increased and they were 33000. but man pupils was around 34000. Sure male ...
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Suggestion: didn't
...e 27000. The graph shows in 2015 female didnt grow In conclusion female pupils d...
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Suggestion: didn't
...t grow In conclusion female pupils didnt grow and feom 1985 to 2010 male and wom...
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Suggestion: But
...5 to 2010 male and woman students grew. but the graph shows that from 2010 female s...
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the number of woman students increase. Although we dont have information in 2019. ...
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Suggestion: don't
...of woman students increase. Although we dont have information in 2019.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, then, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 853.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95930232558 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.15316531556 2.65546596893 81% => OK
Unique words: 76.0 106.607317073 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441860465116 0.547539520022 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 22.4926829268 49% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8506235767 43.030603864 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 56.8666666667 112.824112599 50% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.4666666667 22.9334400587 50% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.86666666667 5.23603664747 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453055193034 0.215688989381 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174904971742 0.103423049105 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.256429142939 0.0843802449381 304% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.430687791664 0.15604864568 276% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.331791527728 0.0819641961636 405% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 13.2329268293 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 85.69 61.2550243902 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.0 10.3012195122 39% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.3 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.83 8.06136585366 72% => OK
difficult_words: 18.0 40.7170731707 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 11.4329268293 35% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.9970731707 58% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 4.0 11.0658536585 36% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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