In terms of successfully developing the country, there are several ways. I believe that one of them and the crucial one is improving the school's quality. Even though other factor plays an enormous role in development. They are not as necessary as
schools.
On the one hand, Schools are the most important field to grow successful students. Improving school will benefit students learning capability and encourage the student. Efficiency would be increased, as a result of this, more productive, creative and social individuals would be grown. For Instance, the Turkish government spends two-fifth of its refunds to obtain such effective people. Therefore a well-developed individual contributes to society and, the country shows a significant effect on all other fields as well.
On the other hand, As long as the schools are improved, education quality will improve and the popularity of the country will increase. There are many foreign students who are looking for education abroad. the countries which are developed would be the first considerable country to study in. In addition to this, the students will benefit to tourism and the economy as well.
As such there will be more chances to develop the country in other aspects. Even though there is no direct relation between improving education and other fields. There will be a noticeable effect in a long-time period
In conclusion, As the new generation will be our future, it is necessarily important to think ever steps will be taken. Giving a quality education would be the best choice for them to have a clear future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...l one is improving the schools quality. Even though other factor plays an enormous role in ...
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Suggestion:
...evelopment. They are not as necessary as schools. On the one hand, Schools are...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...efunds to obtain such effective people. Therefore a well-developed individual contributes...
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Suggestion: The
...s who are looking for education abroad. the countries which are developed would be ...
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...fit to tourism and the economy as well. As such there will be more chances to deve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17898832685 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80944630467 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544747081712 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5020733101 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.2941176471 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1176470588 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0525425158723 0.244688304435 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0206076015684 0.084324248473 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280875034869 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0321811688192 0.151304729494 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0108929147444 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.17 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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