TPO40
Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think it is a good idea?
Since the dawn of civilization, education has played a dominant role in the individual’s way of living. academicians are putting all their efforts to find the ways which can improve both the education system, and children efficiency to make a better world in the future. there exist the inevitable questions which has caused heated debate among academicians that is ''what is parents role to boost the training system?'' some people are inclining toward the opinion that paying to school for each good mark, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. I agree with the prior group. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will explicate my point of view thorough outstanding reasons and provide some details to elucidate my opinion.
The most prominent point to be mention is that the education has a significant and undeniable task in one's success and happiness. because of its important, states have the ministry of education. Consequently, there must be strict oversight of the schools. Sometimes some parents pay money for their children’s grade. Over time, this action will divert schools from their mission; it causes some schools do not follow their aim and their instruction which governments prepare them for make an advanced society. For example, my cousin, who call Zobin, educated such school. After a few years later, we heard his school is closed and their teachers were fired because they appeal some extra money to teach better.
Another equally noteworthy and exquisite idea that comes to my mind regarding the boost of children's score is that parents can encourage and give some presents them. this action make a better feel and children learn that there is a reward for their good and decent operation. I believe its benefits outweigh the drawbacks. Also, children should be knowing there is a fine of their mistakes. In Sharif university of Tehran, one of the most prestigious universities in my country, a very reliable research conducted recently and it revealed that the majority of students who were cheered by parents are more success.
in short, all aforementioned led us conclusion that education is leading in people life and parent should be follow and help their authorities to achieve their goals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...as a significant and undeniable task in ones success and happiness. because of its i...
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...ble task in ones success and happiness. because of its important, states have the minis...
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... some extra money to teach better. Another equally noteworthy and exquisite...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, regarding, so, whereas, for example, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23691460055 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78690408597 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600550964187 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2198180237 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.052631579 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265837955394 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705468442434 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763271639668 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144494271898 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704002498154 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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