In the last decades, the role of women has changed radically, the majority of married women nowadays are full-time employees, which left them little time for their home and children. Many people think that this change in the position of women in the society is the cause of many problem that young people experience these days, and I completely agree with this opinion.
Women are the schools where children learned the first lessons, the importance of women as a caregiver to their children overwhelm any other role women may play. I agree that women need to work and to make money, and they can help the society and the economy to grow, and it is a fact that most women are good at their jobs. However, I also believe that women can help the society better if they take care of their families and spare more time for their children instead of spending all the time between work and hanging out.
In the past, when women were at their natural position in society as a caregiver, and when children are brought up with their mothers instead of babysitters, society was stronger and more disciplined than as it is nowadays. Many of the problems young people now experience such as juvenile delinquency, drugs, school dropout, and many other issues will not happen if women played their natural role and took care of their kids.
In conclusion, the change of the position of women in society over the last decades has significant impacts on the society. When women choose their jobs over their children, they weaken the society and make young people vulnerable to many problems and crimes. If we want the society to be strong again and to protect teenagers from nowadays' problems, women must return to their natural position and take care of their children and their family.
- The chart below show the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 61
- the table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999 76
- while recruiting a new employee,the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities rather than qualifications and experience .To what extent do you agree or disagree .give your opinion with relevant example. 61
- In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.Give reasons for your answer and incl 73
- Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on the idea that they are also responsible bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagr 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'many problems'.
Suggestion: many problems
...of women in the society is the cause of many problem that young people experience these days...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78246753247 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31506711705 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477272727273 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.3681800594 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 147.3 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456636746263 0.244688304435 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.2003727466 0.084324248473 238% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666149603675 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298609368002 0.151304729494 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453647675523 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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