You belong to a group which has been using a hall near your home to meet once a month for the last three years. You have just heard that the rent for the hall will double next month. Your group cannot possible afford such a large increase.
Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is Kulwinder Paul. I belong to a senior citizen club. This club has been using your community hall for organize some activities once a month. Nowadays, it has to hear that your hall management has going to increase hall rent.
Our club’s members are almost senior citizen of our area. This club had established three years ago and continuously organized social activities in your hall. The activities are like cooking, playing games and other contest. The main reason is behind that to keep away from their loneliness and depression. Retired and pensioner people are part of this club so they have little bit money to spend their life. Furthermore, there have not other hall in our area to reach there easily.
I would like to recommend to you that do not raise your hall rent because it unaffordable for us. I will appreciate to you if you understand our situation.
Yours Truly,
Kulwinder
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Sentence: This club has been using your community hall for organize some activities once a month.
Description: The token for is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to for and organize
hall management has going to increase hall rent.
hall management is going to increase the hall rent.
The main reason is behind that to keep away
The main reason behind that is to keep away
because it unaffordable for us
because it is unaffordable for us
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Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 10
No. of Words: 158 200
No. of Characters: 737 1000
No. of Different Words: 103 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.545 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.665 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.469 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 41 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 30 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 11.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.147 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.214 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4