Nowadays cultures of different countries are becoming more similar than they used to be.
What are the reasons? Is it a positive or a negative development? Give your own opinion and examples.
The whole world has undergone dramatic changes over couple of decades. Presently, cultural and traditional values of different countries are being converted in to single world culture. Here, I would like to establish reasons, positive and negative effects of this phenomenon.
There are multifarious reasons behind this happening. First and foremost, increasingly transportation services especially air plans are bridging the gaps between cultures worldwide. For example, people are travelling from one country to another country where they experience different lifestyles such as eating, wearing, ...
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Tnx sir , tell me if I write
Tnx sir , tell me if I write to be specific,
will it be considered as example or it has own individiality ?????
can I teach it to my students in order to avoid repeatition of for example ..time and again ???
n how are the ideas in above essay ???
Well, it is specific. the
Well, it is specific. the essay topic is: 'What are the reasons? Is it a positive or a negative development?', and you write it accordingly:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reasons
para 3: good
para 4: bad
para 5: conclusion
but we can figure out that you have made some efforts on the essay boy development.
Q:will it be considered as example or it has own individiality
A:for the similar essay topics, you can consider it as an example.
Q:can I teach it to my students in order to avoid repeatition of for example ..time and again ???
A:you can teach them whatever you think is correct. There is no teaching pattern over there. The important thing is that you need to get feedback from those who just took IELTS test and back from the IELTS test room, and to check out whether the reaching method is correct or not.
Q:n how are the ideas in above essay ???
A: if it is in the IELTS test room, maybe you couldn't apply a lot of good ideas in a limited time. So you may ask your students put less ideas in the essays. Around 350 words are enough.
tnxxx ...but erlier u told me
tnxxx ...but erlier u told me if you put every idea with example ,, examiner may notice it as a pattern
that is why I asked u if I write to be specific instead of example ???
becoz my students feel far more comfortable if they are asked to put example with every idea ??
tell me whether they notice if every idea with example n thus reduce the bands or not ??????
Well, we got the point. The
Well, we got the point. The correct answer is: you don't need examples. Simply make it specific. The most comfortable way is the right way.
and yes, if the examiners figured out there is a pattern, it may get bands reduced. That's the reason we ask users gradually have their own writing styles.
Dear writer, I should warn
Dear writer,
I should warn you not to view your 8/9 score as an IELTS Band 8 nor is it Excellent.
While your writing is not bad, it would not warrant an IELTS Band 8. There are many errors that this system of evaluation missed. I stopped reading at Beside . . . which more that likely should be Besides. Here are a few more examples - increasingly / air plans / travelling / such as eating, wearing, living so on /
people in entire globe . . .
Dear writer, I should warn
Dear writer,
I should warn you not to view your 8/9 score as an IELTS Band 8 nor is it Excellent.
While your writing is not bad, it would not warrant an IELTS Band 8. There are many errors that this system of evaluation missed. I stopped reading at Beside . . . which more that likely should be Besides. Here are a few more examples - increasingly / air plans / travelling / such as eating, wearing, living so on /
people in entire globe . . .
check sir ??