The extended family is less important now than it was in the past.
There have been several disputed discussions on whether the extended family plays a less important role in the present as compared to the past. As for everything, there are always two sides to every question; howbeit, personally, I believe that an extended family plays a more important role in the present as compared to the past. I feel this for two reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
First of all, the first reason is that extended family helps in financial crises; moreover, they are also supported whenever we find difficulty in sense of personal difficulties. My personal experience is a compelling example of this; about 10 years ago, my father faced huge losses in the business. he had to pay money to trade creditors as well as to bank. In such difficult condition, My uncle, Ramesh arora, helped us not only to repay the loan to bank as well as creditors but also invested its capital in the same business so that business will continue and did not face struck off; therefore, extended family provides financial assistance to other members, If they needed.
Besides, the second reason is that extended family helps in personal problems; furthermore, grandparents gives such teaching lessons which are very important for the development of a person. For a better understanding; let us take the metaphor of my cousin's brother; about 4 months back, his father has died in a car accident. He was not ready to take his father business because of less knowledge of that particular business; my father helped him to teach the background that business, and provide him the important rules and principles which will be benefited him for future growth of that business. As he grew up, he understands the business very well and makes the profit out of small capital; thus, sometimes extended family plays the role of teachers or guru for other family members.
In conclusion, although there are some scenarios where extended family plays a less important role in present as compare to past; howbeit, these scenarios are very rare and can be forgettable. Therefore I believe that extended family plays an important role in present as compare to past because they help in the future growth of other family members as well as extended help by providing financial assistance
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as for, as to, i feel, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00520833333 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70451955036 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502604166667 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.2343498961 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.846153846 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5384615385 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6153846154 5.45110844103 213% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28798772911 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111336342238 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0998576609809 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197932026484 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089274777444 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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