The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in a effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree?
Nowadays, obesity and its correlated diseases are one of the most big issue to the health system. Mostly people believe that a solution needs to be taken in order to cut this occurrences. While some people think that increase the physical education lessons in the school curriculum could be a way to avoid this problem, others think that can be another ways to avoid this and I will explain in the following essay.
First, I strongly believe that the offer of unhealthy food is the most dangerous thing that can affect people’s health. Considering this, the government should establish some control in how the food industry presents the aliments to the population in order to people become aware about what they are eating and what kind of health problems they can get. For instance, advertisement and packages from junk food could be controlled and have some warning to people really understand the dangerous about this kind of food.
Therefore more exercises should bring a healthier lifestyle to children on the schools, this is not the only choice to avoid the strain that the healthy system are dealing with overweight. Unfortunately our culture stimulate a bad eating and in order to reduce the consume of unhealthy foods, the schools could teach children about the importance to take fresh food and cook your own meals with the view of creating a consciousness to children about how they can get a healthier way of living and avoid overweight.
Concluding, giving knowledge to children and people about eating well is a good way to start an improvement in our health and reduce the big effort that the health system need to deal about obesity and its correlated diseases.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, really, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03521126761 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62072854594 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524647887324 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.3221886217 49.4020404114 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.888888889 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5555555556 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.55555555556 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325493901986 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131510648776 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584297455849 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189594344127 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457005606839 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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