Nowadays a large amount of advertising aiming at children should be banned because of its negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that advertising has put considerable detrimental effect on children. While I agree that children are vulnerable when exposed to advertising, putting constraints on the advertisers instead of banning them is a more practical measure.
Children's brains and personalities are fluid when they are young, which makes them more susceptible to advertising. But exaggeration and imagination are widely used in the advertising campaign. While adults can easily distinguish the false part of the information from the real features, children don't have the mental toolset to filter out things which are obviously wrong, and this makes them especially vulnerable to advertising. My cousin is three years old. When he saw an online advertisement of a cloak toy the other day, he cried for it because he believed anyone wearing the cloak could fly.
Another problem is that advertisers do not act in the best interests of the people they are advertising to. Instead, their first priority is promoting the commodities as many as possible. If there is no restriction on the advertising, the motivation for them to take advantage of children's vulnerability can be appealing.
However, advertising is an essential approach for people to keep track of the latest advances in products, including the beneficial ones like educational toys and equipment. For example, a series of marvelous colorful advertising in the 1970s helped Apple II start the boom in personal computer sales, which successfully introduced lots of children into the new computer world. It is a win-win for both advertiser and children.
In conclusion, while it's easy to for advertising to manipulate children by misleading information, it is also useful for children and parents to keep touch with the newest advance of commodities. So, it is better to put strains on the advertisement that targets the children rather than prohibit it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38410596026 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12751806361 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609271523179 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2054387469 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16917014127 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604064045267 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397915825947 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104483325664 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320048655053 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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