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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

In today's progressive world, no can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of television advertising for young children. Some are inclined towards the opinion that TV advertising directed towards people aged two to five years should not be allowed. On the other extreme of rope, others hold the opposite view. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my points of view.

As the first and paramount reason, young children do not have capability to understand the tools that are used in marketing to convince them buy something. In other words, these people can be easy deceived. Nowadays, the marketing strategy is very advanced. Moreover, the advertising that are produced by big companies can provide for these children false illusion usefullness of toys. For instance, my brother, who is 4 years old is always watching kids channels. So, he watch television advertising that is directed for young children. As a result, he always asks for my parents to buy some cars toys. However, we try to explain for he that advertising that he saw does not represent the real toy.

The second reason coming to my mind to substantive my viewpoint is that, television advertising provides a compulsive behavior for young children in order to have huge profits. To be more specific, these people all the time try to buy the last brand new toy, but it is impossible. Thus, these action causes compulsive behavior. For example, experimental research conducted by some master psychology students shows the relation between Television advertising for young children and compulsive behavior. Because these children can not control the impulsive area in the brain, called pre-cortex. Furthermore, they can not understand the true idea of a determined toy and they can be stress and worries. Hence, they might have a mental conflict, that is not good for these people.

In conclusion, taking the above reasons into account, I strongly believe that, television advertising for young children need to be prohibited. This is because these people do not have the comprehension of what is real or nor and because the television advertising can generate bad behaviors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'watches'.
Suggestion: watches
...s always watching kids channels. So, he watch television advertising that is directed...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.176 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8463890575 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.024679625 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2272727273 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23967027438 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702816376578 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846764449276 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164578481143 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493756996294 0.0645574589148 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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