It is believed that advertising exerts extremely negative impacts on young-aged audiences. For this reason, a wealthy number of people suggest the governments to prohibit it as early as possible. From my personal perspective, I totally disagree with this point of view.
On the one hand, there are various reasons why aim-children advertisements should be removed. One of the primary factors is youngsters easily to be influenced. Children do not completely aware of what they are watching, they love advertisement due to their innocent and childlike view, as a result, these types of kids tend to imitate actors, actresses on a program, which is not incompatible with their age. Furthermore, young adults often ask parents to afford upcoming goods on advertising such as fabulous toys, video games, and fast food. To exemplify, in lieu of eating a home-cooked meal, children are likely to consume a great amount of junk food because of its visually attractive and actor’s level of happiness after having a huge hamburger. Secondly, advertising is one of the reasons why children are keen on watching television. Research has found that there is an increase in the number of adolescents being short-sighted, which is taken into account as a result of sticking eyes to screen for a long period. Staring at the computer or smartphone screen in an attempt to watch advertising could lead to an unhealthy sedentary lifestyle without exercise and movement. It is an apparent fact that youngsters stand a chance to be obese, have low resistance and Developmental Delays, by spending advertisements as much as they wish.
In terms of prohibiting advertising targets at children, they might have more opportunities to nourish their natural ability. Undeniably, if adolescents stop watching these time-consuming content, they are able to own many value times. By dint of reading books, playing sports or communicating with their peers, young adults have chances to explore and develop themselves day by day, instead of sitting at home full day with non-benefit acts.
Taking everything into consideration, I still strongly support the idea which state that advertisement is adversely detrimental for children. These explanations have been outlined above will justify my opinion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1912.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34078212291 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07708158369 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642458100559 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7693179764 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.470588235 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200032614893 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594696154869 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533904929761 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0951132620896 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555837977869 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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