Many young people now know more about international pop and movie stars than famous people in the history of their countries. What are the causes? Give solutions to increase the number of people to know about famous people in history.
Nowadays, the large proportion of the youth put celebrities' life under the microscope and thus, are more aware of them, meanwhile, know nothing about famous people in the history of their culture. Although there is a specific root cause behind this issue, effective policies can be adopted to remedy the situation.
The most axiomatic reason why youngsters are less aware of reputed individuals in their culture is rooted in the fact that technology development in related to the internet, smart-phones and personal computers lead to the increased exposure the broadcast information through the media. Since the vast majority of the media set up in such a way to boost the stockholders' revenue, cover the news and information by which reap their benefits including an advertisement for the latest films on the cinema or concerts. A good illustration of this is clearly delineated by HBO channel which firmly endorses the viewpoint that they just focus on their interests by showing movies and advertising irrespective of other aspects of their influence. This in turn affects the youth who are most widely audiences and are bound to mould their thoughts and interest toward fleeting excitement while keep away from the more important topic such as their history.
There are, however, some viable solution to tackle this new phenomenon. One step would be making compulsory introducing famous people between broadcasting film rather than advertising products to show the youth how much their culture is important. This is mainly because most of the young people have not caught sight of the groundbreaking achievement in their country by famous people. Another police should put into effect is to encourage competitiveness among the youth in order to secure job prospects instead of religious background which is a really common trend in the Islamic countries like Iran for employment. This is a contributing factor to develop a sense of national identity and keep our famous people alive.
To conclude, placing a great emphasis on films and music by the media is a potential culprit to lessen the awareness of famous people in the country and responsible entities should bring in a whole range of measures such as motivating youngsters and enforcing the media to show historical program.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'stockholders'' or 'stockholder's'?
Suggestion: stockholders'; stockholder's
...media set up in such a way to boost the stockholders revenue, cover the news and information...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, so, thus, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22764227642 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84786844037 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60433604336 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.7437984042 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.75 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.75 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257518158434 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903291111833 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862172531816 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153729474736 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745833962856 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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