In this modern age ,many of men assert that technology and science should be noticed more in teaching curriculum .some other people ,on the contrary, contend that history is as most important as other programs .I am in favour with the first idea in order to following reasons which are twofold.
Firstly ,it worth nothing that since tutors can find any thing about their ancestors on google just by a fingertip ,it is not essential to spend many hours to teach them some unnecessary stories. Albeit many of these true stories can be like a lantern for students' future lives ,according to a survey by Pr.Geller ,a scares number of them could remember history after their graduation. I remember the second year of high school I gained number A for my history exam but after awhile I could not even name the dynasties respectively.
Secondly, and far more importantly, people requirements is the rapid enhance of technology. Every now and then a new model of cellphone release to market but after a short time there is no tendency to that phone because a new technology is asked. Thereupon it is better to allot much more time to science and tech in school to keep the student up to date. As well as all mentioned points, what makes it more noticeable about teaching technology in school is that tutors get used to
Search for their project and seek for novel science. For instance Coronavirus, which is a lethal epidemic virus ,is murdering thousand of people throughout the world. Despite all efforts ,the is no cure for this up to now which this script is written . Nation and also religious seek for a help according to science whereas there is no cure for this compare with all previous historical diseases.
By way of conclusion, I would reaffirm that the benefits of technology and science outweigh history insomuch we can use tech for obviating people's requirement in medical purposes and also developing the world. But just by one click on network students can learn many thing about history .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, while, for instance, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81449275362 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58051101822 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579710144928 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6205327842 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.769230769 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5384615385 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202882776004 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699502804394 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559710984181 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118781175255 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639154031077 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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