Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples.

Submitted by pazhakh on Sun, 10/19/2014 - 18:20

In modern times, societies have been in the state of flux and far away from what they used to be. Families, known as fundamental blocks of each society, are not exception, and they seem different in some aspects. One important variation is the weight which people give to family size. Some people if asked would agree with the statement that the number of family members does not matter anymore, however, this idea has its opponent. As far as I am concerned, large families are still preferable. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

To begin with, no matter how much societies change...

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are not exception
are not exceptional

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