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friend has decided to switch careers but isn t sure which to choose What advice would you give them Provide reasons and examples to support your response

No one can deny that finding an appropriate career is one the most difficult events in anyone’s life. What if the job that one has found is not the job that he/she has been imagining? What if he/she thinks that he/she needs to change it? If one of my friends needs my advices in this particular issue at first I would say how inappropriate decision she is going to make. I will explain my advices and my reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I will try to remind my friend that what hardships she had suffered at begging of her current job. For example, entering a new enviroment and facing many new and strange colleagues or how much stress she had been through till she got adopted with the new job. By reminding these difficulties, I will explain her that if she change his job she has to face all of them again. Drawing from my own experience, when I was 20 I started working as a teacher. First few months of my start was the worse days I have ever had due to my challenges that I had with students, colleagues, management etc. Although I could handle all of them successfully, I decided to quite my job and looking for a new career which was a huge mistake. In my new job I had to face all those kinds of problems again. As a result, after I settled in my new job I never changed it. For this reason, I definetly would advice my friend to stop thinking about this issue.
Sencodly, after working on a particular position the employees not only literally become a professional but also, give promotions and make progress in their job and become successful.Yet, by quiting a job and starting a new one, new employee again has to try so hard to achieve manager’s interest to get promotions and progress to a higher rank. For instance, Mark Zakerberg, the owner of the Facebook one was an employee who wanted to change his job but instead he insisted on his job and try to develop in it. And now, his one the most successful people in the world. This clearly shows how it is important to keep working on a job to become successful.
In the light of above-mentioned reasons, I will advice my friend to focus on her current career and stop thinking about a new job.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...as found is not the job that he/she has been imagining? What if he/she thinks that he/she need...
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Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ound is not the job that he/she has been imagining? What if he/she thinks that he...
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Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... thinks that he/she needs to change it? If one of my friends needs my advices in t...
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Line 2, column 339, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'changes'.
Suggestion: changes
...culties, I will explain her that if she change his job she has to face all of them aga...
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Line 2, column 898, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'advise' (a verb)?
Suggestion: advise
... it. For this reason, I definetly would advice my friend to stop thinking about this i...
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Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Yet
...ress in their job and become successful.Yet, by quiting a job and starting a new on...
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Line 4, column 49, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'advise' (a verb)?
Suggestion: advise
...ight of above-mentioned reasons, I will advice my friend to focus on her current caree...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, as to, for example, for instance, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40987654321 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66683355673 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488888888889 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4298669581 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3157894737 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0929895856039 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367766263943 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423126385402 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684720867572 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345576110254 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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