You share a room at the university with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because the other student always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at your college. In your letter:
• Describe the problems you have
• Ask for a new room
• Explain why it is so essential to move
Dear Mr.William,
I am writing to complain about a serious issue relating to my flatmate at Wellington Halls of Residence and to provide me with alternative accommodation.
I currently share room 24A with a fellow-student. Unfortunately, my roommate's behavior has become a significant problem. Although I understand that it is reasonable to invite friends and classmates around, he seems to throw parties every night, and often there are more than a dozen individuals in our room, drinking, smoking, laughing, shouting, and listening to loud music after midnight. Even during the day-time, it is quite common for there to be five or six other students there, and I find this both disturbing and distracting. What's more, both my roommate and his friends keep stealing my food from the fridge, freezer, or cupboards. I have repeatedly asked them not to, but they take absolutely no notice of my requests.
For these reasons, I would be grateful if you could offer me a different, and hopefully quieter, room. I do take my studies seriously and want to leave university with the kind of qualification which will enable me to find a decent job as an engineer. I am afraid this will not happen if I cannot study in peace and have trouble sleeping. I understand it may be difficult to organize a room-swap straightaway, but I would be delighted if something could be arranged for the beginning of next term.
I am sorry to have to contact you about this delicate matter and sincerely hope you will be able to help. If you would like to discuss this issue with me, please contact me, and I will be happy to come and see you.
Yours faithfully,
Arron Joseph
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...d I will be happy to come and see you. Yours faithfully, Arron Joseph
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, well, kind of, i am afraid
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 5.05154639175 337% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 32.9175257732 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 937.175257732 147% => OK
No of words: 285.0 206.0 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84210526316 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93447472128 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 127.690721649 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635087719298 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 290.88556701 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 0.463917525773 1724% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.3508713881 44.8134815571 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5714285714 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3571428571 16.8248392259 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 4.34317383033 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.49484536082 468% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241097255449 0.216113520407 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773223208684 0.0766984524023 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576360385644 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125327158188 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438859557184 0.0580467560999 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 41.2886597938 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.