The adulthood could become pretty hectic if one has not been ready for it since their adolescence. I believe the most proper way for kids to be prepared for their adulthood is to have a part-time job in their teenage. It has numerous benefits, such as saving money and helping with independence.
First of all, obtaining a part-time job can bring money to a teenage student. Teenagers usually depend on their families to buy what they need, but having a part-time job can help them have their own money and stop waiting for their allowance. They can buy everything they want, no need for longing anymore. My personal experience is an excellent example of this. Eleven years ago, when I was in high school, my father forced me to work in a grocery store near our house. Although I did not want to do that at first, I realized I was wrong when I tried that for a few months. I could collect some money by doing that job, and buy the Harry Potter books I want. If I had not done that job, I would never have been able to gain a single book since my father refused to buy me one.
In addition to saving money, a part-time job can help a teen become independent and experience better adulthood. Working, whether part-time or full-time, provides an environment for kids that helps them learn about different aspects of life in a society. One of the most significant issues a child should know to survive in the future life is independence. If kids grow up a still depends on their mother to provide their needs, they definitely have trouble separating from their parents when they need to. For instance, because I had worked in my school years, I knew how to make money and stand on my own after finishing high school. So, I managed to choose a college far from my hometown without being worry about my parents.
To sum it up, with all this taking into account, I firmly believe that parents should let their kids take a part-time job since it enables them to become independent and save money.
- Parents involved with their children s education 60
- Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom 65
- Agree or disagree Working slow and correctly or working fast and risk making mistakes 66
- The ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school 76
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50276243094 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47553272308 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558011049724 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0622308853 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5555555556 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361206573742 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109448573474 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985483660428 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236492698687 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024582199564 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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