Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people Why do you think is that Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities

In our contemporary world, shopping has become a lifestyle for some millennials. I can note two key tendencies. Firstly the booming online shopping industry, secondly advertising effectiveness.
In the first place, the availability of online stores makes the process of purchasing goods very simple, and according to statistics, young people spend a lot of time online. On the other hand, uncontrolled spending can lead to financial problems and develop a disease such as shopaholism.
In the second place, the effect of targeted advertising is great. Such as advertising with popular celebrities. Typically, such advertising has an effective impact on young minds and encourages them to purchase the goods they see repeatedly.
In my opinion, young people should spend more time on other activities. In our modern world, there are more useful activities and hobbies. For example, many sports will help just recharge the batteries. If sports activities are not possible for any reason, a good way to do some yoga or fitness. Moreover, the role of parents in organizing their children's free time is enormous. Parents could indicate to rewarding hobbies for their children.
To sum up, media and high level of availability of the online shopping contribute to the “shopping favorite pastime” phenomenon, however; they should avoid this while doing other useful activities. I also believe that parents should teach their children to focus on selective hobbies that could help them in the long run.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1269.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 236.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37711864407 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94047952733 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618644067797 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.2732548357 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3125 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.75 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5625 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23335087306 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622560090375 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698614150819 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110924381241 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668661062021 0.056905535591 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.33 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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