Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money Do you agree or disagree Which other types of job should be highly paid The answer is a sample not written by myself The goal is to compare the sco

Many people think about the profession in entertainment industry most spend a lot of money. For example, actress, singer or model. I agree with this.

The entertainers way have always good looking because they are use beauty face and good shape to repersent in their job also. So they have to take care of themselves. If the actress came from an ordinary person, mostly they change their look by making sugery which spend lots money to get beauty back in the expensive price. While the other kind of works not necessaries to paid for sugery such as doctor, teacher, farmer and so on. They just keep teir look following age.

In my opinoin, everyone can be beauty or handsome in the way you are. Except you are superstar and well-known from your occupation, you earn a lot of money. Then, you can paid everything for yourself that make you happy.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...nd good shape to repersent in their job also. So they have to take care of themselve...
^^^^
Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'pay'
Suggestion: pay
... you earn a lot of money. Then, you can paid everything for yourself that make you h...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, then, well, while, for example, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 41.998997996 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 702.0 1615.20841683 43% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 150.0 315.596192385 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 4.20363070211 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40429245771 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 176.041082164 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.706666666667 0.561755894193 126% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 506.74238477 43% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3824689891 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.8181818182 106.682146367 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.6363636364 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141023561892 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495334188069 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371272321436 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924289776012 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021411296496 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 13.0946893788 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 78.4519038076 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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