The issue here is whether human activity is making the earth a worse place to live. In my opinion, human activity is totally ruining the lives on Earth especially in an environmental point of view. My view can be greatly substantiated by the reasons addressed below.
To begin with, human activity pollutes the earth. For centuries, human tried to take profit out of the nature, by extracting natural gases, petroleum, and mining. By utilizing these natural resources sources the development of technology, human culture, and industries were surely propelled but these comforts of civilization had to be compensated by pollution. For example, few years ago, there was a heated debate about the Fukusima nuclear disaster in Japan. After the Fukusima nuclear disaster, radioactive materials spreaded out throught the pacific ocean, and gave bad influence to the marine ecology. Many marine animals and plants were polluted, thus mutant species with aberrant features.
Second of all, human activity destroys the natural habitats for living things on earth. In many countries, woods and mountains are destroyed in order to make a huge plantation or yards to grow livestocks. In consequence, wild animals' habitat are becomeing extinct and even if they survive, the population is altered by exotic species that human brought in. For instance, avocado became a symbol of healthy food because many hollywood stars enjoyed it. Nowadyas, consumer demand for avocado has been increased and in order to meet the demand, woods and mountains of North America are turned into avocado plantations. According to an environmental campaign group, Greenpeace, numbers of wild animals such as tigers and monkeys are becoming extinct and they need proper protection.
Third, human activity facillitates natural disasters on earth. Civilization has been a hinderance for the environmental cycle. In the law of physics, every components of environment such as soil, water, wind, air have to circulate and change its form. However, cities and artificial structures such as aspart roads, dams, bridges, tunnels hinder the circulation of environement. For instance, human have built dams in order to control the water circulation and create electricity from the dropping power of the water. Currently on worldwide, despite the increased numbers of dam, flood is becoming aggravated and many countries are not capable of controlling the water. Since our nature is so complex and sophisticated, natural impact of artificial structures can not be precisely anticipated nor calculated by the thoughts of human. The greed of human population to control and seize over nature actually facilitates the natural disasters on earth.
In conclusion, I personally believe human activity is making the earth a worse place to live. The more human society is globalized, convenient, and prospered, the earth is being destroyed. The negative environmental impacts of human civilization can not be dismissed. Fundamental change of modern civilization is in desperate need.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, second, so, third, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2573.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48614072495 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94301622678 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56289978678 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4950202455 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2962962963 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3703703704 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191436976215 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650911539972 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947026353107 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132405262826 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787986901105 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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