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Parents attempt to create motivation for their children in various ways. Some people think the best way to persuade children to read and practice more is by giving them money. Others hold the view that it has a negative impact on children over time. Personally, I think although it might encourage kids in a short time, in contrast, it causes several problems in the long term. The following paragraph will aptly substantiate my viewpoint.
First, the motivation for reading and practicing should be intrinsic. If parents give money to them , children will become addicted to getting money for every good thing that they want to do. Thus if they know they don't get any money, they will not read and do their homework anymore. Parents aren't always with children, so they can't support children forever. Children should learn that getting good marks are good for their future and it is greater motivation for them than receiving money. My nephew is the best example of it. When he began school, my brother gives him a gift or money as he got good marks each time. After one year, we found that he was accustomed to giving gifts, each time when he didn't get a gift he wouldn't study for the next exam. It was very bad for his education because at that time he missed some important concepts that he quit because he didn't receive anything.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it has bad effects on children's education. This is because children become addicted to receiving money. Thus, when they don't have motivation finally their learning becomes worse.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, so, thus, i think, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1292.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82089552239 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39131432741 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59328358209 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3087608098 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.0 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7647058824 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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