In this argument, the arguer contends that it is highly profitable to establish a jazz music club in Monroe. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer points out that jazz is very popular among the city, the nearest jazz club is far away, and a study shows that the representative jazz fan spends nearly one thousand dollars annually on jazz entertainment. Although this suggestion may seem quite convincing at first glance, the arguer does not conclusively justify his conclusion. More evidence is needed to form a better evaluation of the other’s suggestion
To begin with, to strengthen the argument, the arguer has to provide the evidence that residents will reject to go to the nearby jazz club after the C-Note’s opening. However, it is perfectly possible that many residents are big fans of some stars in the nearby clubs. Thus, they will continue to support their idols regardless of the 65 miles distance. Furthermore, jazz has a lot of forms, and chances are that citizens do not like the music style offered by C-Note. Either of the scenarios, if true, would undermine the author’s conclusion.
In addition, even though the arguer claims that jazz is very popular in the city because more than 100,000 people attended the annual jazz festival last year, more evidence is needed to prove that those people are really like jazz. To be more specific, if there is no other festivals or raucous celebrations, people, who just do not like to stay at home, would have no choice to attend the jazz festival. Plus, well-known jazz musicians cannot guarantee the popularity of jazz unless there is some evidence show that most residents are fascinated with those musicians. However, perhaps that those musicians are only connected to a local music school, and people who live in Monroe are not familiar with them. Without ruling out these possibilities, the author cannot convince us that the conclusion is cogent.
Granted that jazz is popular and the new jazz club can take up the whole local market, another evidence is also crucial is that whether the nationwide survey applies equally to jazz fans in Monroe. It is possible that local jazz fans are live in a lower condition than nationwide typical jazz fans. Thus, they may choose to spend little on some expensive jazz entertainment and enjoy their habit in cheaper ways such as free TV programs. If this is the case, it would render the arguer’s conclusion much less persuasive.
To sum up, although the arguer provides some information to support his idea, there are still some doubtful points that need to be addressed by more convincing evidence.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 438 350
No. of Characters: 2120 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.575 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.84 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.522 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.787 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, still, then, thus, well, as to, in addition, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00913242009 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64642108263 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527397260274 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0818974991 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.888888889 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22426170655 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694488245206 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055670670128 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119306932505 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055230285648 0.0628817314937 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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