When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity: the recordings showed an average of only 50 cars per day. In contrast, tiny Carlton Park in the heart of the business district is visited by more than 150 people on a typical weekday. An obvious difference is that Carlton Park, unlike Stanley Park, provides ample seating. Thus, if Stanley Park is ever to be as popular with our citizens as Carlton Park, the town will obviously need to provide more benches, thereby converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument suggests that the popularity of a park is relevant to whether it has the open area socializing, and by comparing Stanley park to Carlton park, author recommonds that the park with more space for socializing has higher popularity. A causual reading of the statement seems convincing, but a careful inspection brings out some loopholes in the claim. The argument is flawed in many places and cannot be accepted as reliable source of study.
First, the arugemnt recommonds that Stanley park's populairty, according the number of visiting cars recorded by the video camera, is dropping and by comparing to the number of visitors in the Caltron park is burdgeoning. However, author assumes the nuumber of visitors is equivalent to the number of cars and consequently concludes the number of people visiting Staneley park on the basis of the number of cars recorded, whereas it is not the case when it come to the Caltron park. So making a comparison between the two parks does not make any sense. If two huandred people visited Stanley car park, but only fw of them owned the cars, the evidence that author provided is all but nonsense. Furthermore, irrespective of whether there are just fifty people who owned the cars visited the Stanley car park, it is inaccurate soley dependent upon the Video camera to record the numebr of visitors since cameras are unable to cover every single corners, particularly Stanley car is the biggest the park in the town and so might not be possible for camera to entirely cover the it.So if camera missed recording other hundred visitors, it would invalidated the evidence author provided.
Second, the popularity of a park also depens upon its location. Author mentioned that Caltron park situats in the heart of business district,which logically contributes to the high popularity. On the other hand, the argument does not indicate whether the Stanley park locates in the similar areas. If it located in the outside the urban aras, it would, on common sense, have lower popularity comparing to those in the cities. In addition to the location of the parks, author assumes that visitors in the park are for the socials without convincing evidence. But It is likely that people might just coincidently visit the park. In a consequence, these incomplete and unproven assumtions weaken the arguemnt.
In conclusion, had the author provided more concrete evidence other than subjective assumptions, the argument would have been more convincing; Or alternatively,If author had subsumed the assumption with complete and valid evidence, the claim would have been less controversial.
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Sentence: However, author assumes the nuumber of visitors is equivalent to the number of cars and consequently concludes the number of people visiting Staneley park on the basis of the number of cars recorded, whereas it is not the case when it come to the Caltron park.
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Sentence: Furthermore, irrespective of whether there are just fifty people who owned the cars visited the Stanley car park, it is inaccurate soley dependent upon the Video camera to record the numebr of visitors since cameras are unable to cover every single corners, particularly Stanley car is the biggest the park in the town and so might not be possible for camera to entirely cover the it.So if camera missed recording other hundred visitors, it would invalidated the evidence author provided.
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Sentence: If it located in the outside the urban aras, it would, on common sense, have lower popularity comparing to those in the cities.
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Sentence: The argument suggests that the popularity of a park is relevant to whether it has the open area socializing, and by comparing Stanley park to Carlton park, author recommonds that the park with more space for socializing has higher popularity.
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Sentence: A causual reading of the statement seems convincing, but a careful inspection brings out some loopholes in the claim.
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Sentence: First, the arugemnt recommonds that Stanley park's populairty, according the number of visiting cars recorded by the video camera, is dropping and by comparing to the number of visitors in the Caltron park is burdgeoning.
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Sentence: If two huandred people visited Stanley car park, but only fw of them owned the cars, the evidence that author provided is all but nonsense.
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Sentence: However, author assumes the nuumber of visitors is equivalent to the number of cars and consequently concludes the number of people visiting Staneley park on the basis of the number of cars recorded, whereas it is not the case when it come to the Caltron park.
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Sentence: Second, the popularity of a park also depens upon its location.
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Sentence: Author mentioned that Caltron park situats in the heart of business district,which logically contributes to the high popularity.
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Sentence: If it located in the outside the urban aras, it would, on common sense, have lower popularity comparing to those in the cities.
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Sentence: But It is likely that people might just coincidently visit the park.
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Sentence: In a consequence, these incomplete and unproven assumtions weaken the arguemnt.
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