Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny the paramount role of a good friend in our lives. Friendship is a unique relationship because it is your choice and decision to be with this person. However, is it fair to state that keeping old friends is better than having a new friend? From my point of view, personally, I believe that rapport with an old friend persists longer than a new one for two reasons which I will explore in the following article.
First of all, each relationship should pass through enough time to build strong connections. These connections will help both sides to overcome many difficulties. Therefore an old relationship means that you have a person who knows everything about your attitude or thoughts without explanations. For instance, my close friend from a university is Dalia, she lives in Australia with her husband. We are still close friends since 2003. Despite the thousands of miles between us, we still have the same passion in our relationship. When I talk to her, I feel like I am talking to myself in the mirror. On the other hand, recently, I met a young mother in my son’s school and we started to arrange play dates for our kids. After several times of gathering and spending time together, I realized that I do not feel comfortable in this connection because there is nothing common between us.
What’s more, we all noticed that our lives became more complicated and because of the pressure of work and other responsibilities, we barely have enough time and energy to spend it with family. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I am a mother that has two boys, I am working a part-time job as a dental assistant. When I finished my work, I have many duties that have to be done before the end of the day. Therefore, I have no time to make new relations or friends. As well as, I believe that as a mother, my priority is family and kids.
In conclusion, our friends are one of the precious gifts from God. I prefer to have few old friends rather than many new superficial relationships. Because these relevances are time and energy-consuming. As well as, like any other relation, should have strong connections to overcome any difficulties may pass through.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...th sides to overcome many difficulties. Therefore an old relationship means that you have...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71502590674 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8518880277 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549222797927 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9187996714 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1304347826 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7826086957 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78260869565 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205243158498 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05771625078 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711022566262 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139039034273 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956347446199 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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