Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, science and technology have improved every individual's lifestyle, and due to the vastness of sources on different topics, the levels of consciousness have raised and people are more knowledgeable. In this way, I personally believe that the young youth has turned out to be more decisive and youngsters are more independent in making decisions. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, as mentioned in the previous paragraph, thanks to the fast growth of science and technology, and the availability of the internet, people are more knowledgeable. In retrospect, people have become more educated, conscious, and even curious about what is happening around them and since they have the opportunity to search for information around the web, they are more capable of deciding properly. My personal experience is a compelling example of this subject. A few years ago, there was an election in our country and people had to choose the president for the next four years. Actually, most people were discussing the superiority of two of the candidates who were more popular and they almost had the same abilities. So, it was hard to choose the one and vote for him. However, I tried to search their name on the internet and see what they have done during their professional lives. Finally, I figured out that one of the nominates is way better than the other one because he had more experiences in managing political situations. Therefore, choosing among them was not a big deal anymore, even though my parents were holding the opinion that the other candidate is better. At last, by giving plausible reasons and demonstrating the superiority of the candidate of my choice, I even changed my parent's mindset and viewpoint. So, I can say that because of the accessibility of the great source of information, the internet, young people can not only make personal decisions without depending on their parents but also have the power to change their idea.
Another reason that deserves some words here is that in comparison to the past years, people are spending more time with people other than the family members. Actually, today, people, especially the young youth, spend most of their time attending schools and universities, joining different clubs, and gathering with friends. In this way, a group of researchers has shown that people try to copy and imitate the behaviors of the people who are mostly spending time with them. So, I can say that when teenagers and youngsters are mostly with their friends, classmates, and even colleagues, they will probably rely on their ideas to make decisions and not their parents. However, since people in the past were mostly with their family members, followed family businesses, and even married with a member of their family, they were more dependent on their parents.
To sum it up, I believe that people are less dependent on their parents to make decisions because they have become more knowledgable and have the chance to find information using the internet, and they spend less time with their family members.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ence and technology have improved every individuals lifestyle, and due to the vastness of s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, therefore, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06237816764 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75888861611 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475633528265 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.85 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.65 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308150315705 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917115820937 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06806392486 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199380888967 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638176979707 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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