The following essay summarize the changes made on an island to make it attractive for tourism.
Before these changes took place, it was just -apart from many palmtrees- a bare land with a size of about 250 times 150 meters and a beach in its western aspect .
The most notifiable instructions after the new look are the accommodations ,As we can see fifteen of them distributed over two isolated collections, one in the western area and the other in the middle of the island. Each group has footpaths connections between them, and a path from the western one to the beach .
There is a restaurant in the north of the island. From there, a vehicle track leads you immediately to the reception which is located in the centre and surrounded by a similar track.That is directed towards the pier in the south where the boats land .
To sum up, the island after these decorations became very fascinating, most of the requirements of a successful touristic place were included, therefore definitely it will be an incredible destination of many visitors .
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Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 180 200
No. of Characters: 843 1000
No. of Different Words: 117 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.663 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.683 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.774 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 50 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 40 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.222 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.434 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.841 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4