In some parts of the world, convenience food from providers and entrepreneurs donate money to school provided that the schools promote their products to school children. While this campaign brings students many advantages, I think they have some negative impacts on the development of children.
On the one hand, funding from fast food restaurants and companies would be beneficial for school and children. Children are able to benefit from additional resources and facilities that school can efford and in particular an increasing number of students who come from poor families can cover the living costs. Moreover, children are more likely to learn the values of money when they use it to buy the products of being provided. For example, teenagers can learn how to manage money , which is a useful skill for them to develop independence .
Nevertheless , it is undeniable that these advertising promotion have negative influences on children. Promoting companies such as fast food can encourage a poor diet with high quantities of sugar and salt and thus children have to face many serious problems related to health like obesity, high-pressure and diabetes. Advertising and promoting to children can be exploitative and unethical because this form of campaign aim at parents who are willing to buy something as long as their children want , creating a burden financial on parents .
In conclusion, it is true that this publicity campaign help chidren develop in a variety of ways but this approaches have some drawbacks.
- Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication To what extent do you agree or disagree 63
- In some countries fast food restaurant and companies give money to school provided that the schools promote their school children products to school children What do you think is the positive and negative in the development of children 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 60, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e world, convenience food from providers and entrepreneurs donate money to schoo...
^^
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e food from providers and entrepreneurs donate money to school provided that the...
^^
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ool children. While this campaign brings students many advantages, I think they h...
^^
Line 2, column 25, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t of children. On the one hand, funding from fast food restaurants and companies...
^^
Line 2, column 132, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chool and children. Children are able to benefit from additional resources and fa...
^^
Line 2, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nal resources and facilities that school can efford and in particular an increasi...
^^
Line 2, column 423, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...they use it to buy the products of being provided. For example, teenagers can lea...
^^
Line 2, column 487, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... teenagers can learn how to manage money , which is a useful skill for them to dev...
^^
Line 2, column 546, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...l skill for them to develop independence . Nevertheless , it is undeniable that t...
^^
Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... to develop independence . Nevertheless , it is undeniable that these advertising...
^^
Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eniable that these advertising promotion have negative influences on children. P...
^^
Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e that these advertising promotion have negative influences on children. Promoti...
^^
Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ldren have to face many serious problems related to health like obesity, high-pre...
^^
Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ildren can be exploitative and unethical because this form of campaign aim at pa...
^^
Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...al because this form of campaign aim at parents who are willing to buy somethin...
^^
Line 3, column 440, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se this form of campaign aim at parents who are willing to buy something as long...
^^
Line 3, column 505, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...something as long as their children want , creating a burden financial on parents ...
^^
Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
..., creating a burden financial on parents . In conclusion, it is true that this pu...
^^
Line 4, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...elp chidren develop in a variety of ways but this approaches have some drawback...
^^
Line 4, column 118, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n a variety of ways but this approaches have some drawbacks.
^^
Line 4, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...riety of ways but this approaches have some drawbacks.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in particular, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1281.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 243.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27160493827 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88671098071 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588477366255 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 387.9 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4208284479 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.1 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430316754572 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171475599808 0.084324248473 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143640518029 0.0667982634062 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253124543938 0.151304729494 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.177977258096 0.056905535591 313% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.