In any domain to make significant contributions, one must consider the past achievemnets in that domain.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Any achievement is considered significant when it surpasses the previous one. Like, the new record is set when an old one is beaten. In order to do so, it is important to be aware of previous achievements done in that particular domain. If an athlete does not know the record of 100mts running , he/she will not be able to judge the speed of his/her running in any measure. He/she will not know where his/her performance stands in reality. Asserting further, previous achievements serves as primary goals for the aspiring achievers in the process of setting new records. Therefore, I completely agree with author's claim that, if one want to make significant achievement, one must be aware and study past records set in that particular domain.
In recent world Swimming Championships, a Swimmer set new record by beating up the one set by Michel Phelps. In an interview, he admitted that, while practising, his primary goal was to beat up the record set by Phelps in practise atleast twice. This strongly supports the given statement. Similarly, a local runner ran 100mts in lesser time than Usain Bolt and recorded in Guiness World Book of records. He as well admitted that, he habituated himself in the same manner as Usain Bolt runs. Then he personalised his styles by some improvements which helped him set the new record. This reveals that, it is important to study the manner, style of previous achiever in order to break past achievements.
Everyone idolizes someone and tries to become like his/her idol. An aspiring model may idolize Aishwarya rai, an amateur cyclist looks up to Chris Froome as an ideal, an fledgeling Cricketer worships Sachin tendulkar. So, we all try to become like our ideal, for that, we try to know more and more about our idol in an hope that one day we will become like our idol. Hence one makes the idol's achievement as their objective and one will be called as significant contributor when one crosses that level.
But this is not the case always, there are exceptions. Such as Pioneers like Jamshedji Tata, scientists, Bill gates, actors who achieved sky limits in respective domains by buliding their own path to success. The legendary actor Mr. Amitabh Bachhan, he developed his own style and persona which impressed audience. These pioneers are exception to the the claim made by author. But an amateur who wishes to become successful actor and considers Mr. Bachhan as his role model will study his style, approach and will try to imitate the same. He will be considered significant contributor only when he crosses the standards set by Mr. Bachhan.
Conclusively, even there are some pioneers who makes great exceptions to the claim. Most usually, any significant achievement is highly influenced by previous set limits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, may, similarly, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2327.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 465.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00430107527 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71146913592 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520430107527 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2084693744 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.5 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8846153846 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30769230769 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111834844853 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.03536232766 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451375405465 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0651201817774 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358686748991 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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