TOEFL T P O 12 Integrated Writing Task

The passage and the lecture talks about a debate over Jane Austen's potrait. The only known image of Jane Austen is one painted by her sister, Cassandra, which is very "amateurish". However, another full length portrait of a teenage girl has surfaced recently and the entire discussion in the passage and the lecture revovles around whether Jane Austen is the subject of this painting.

Firstly, the passage states that in 1882, Austen's family confirmed that the portrait was hers and gave permission for its use as an illustration in one of her letters. However, the lecturer argues that Jane Austen died 70 years before this happened and none of the family members alive ever saw Austen themselves. The girl in the portrait could very well be someone else from the Austen family.

Secondly, commenting on the similar features of the girl in the portrait and in Cassandra's sketch, the lecturer explains how the extended family that Austen had was very large. Austen had many cousins who were of the age of the girl in the painting, or had daughters of that age, at the time when the portrait was drawn. The lecturer therefore feels that the painting belongs to one of these cousins who shared similar facial features with Austen. Furthermore, he mentions that some experts have stated that the girl in the painting was Austen's niece. The passage however states that the painting was of Austen herself, due to the resemblance in physical features with Cassandra's sketch.

Finally, the lecturer points out that the painting was credited to Humphrey only because of its style. However, a stamp on the back of the canvas proves that it was provided by someone who used to provide such canvases at a time when Austen was 27 years old and not a teenager. Therefore, she cannot be the girl in the painting. The author of the passage, on the other hand believes that the painting was drawn by Humphrey and since this painter was active at a time when Austen was a teenager, it must be her in the painting.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...how the extended family that Austen had was very large. Austen had many cousins who...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 347.0 270.72406181 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81268011527 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58342842638 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481268011527 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1673584851 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.333333333 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1333333333 21.698381199 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06452816374 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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