It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is obvious that certain talents in certain subjects like sport or music and art help people to reach success twice as fast as the other people who do not have any talents in these subjects but there are always exceptions which depend on circumstances. In some cases if the individuals who has certain talents can not discover his/her talents or their family put them under tremendous pressure to forget their talents little by little they miss their innate talents which lead to they could not be able to become a good person according to his/her talent.
It is clear that these days any children can be taught to become a good sports or musician even if they have not any nature talent in these fields. They can learned several techniques and skills by people who are well-known in their fields and they will be able to get success through their patience and hardworking. There are several evidences to show that with hardworking and patience people can become a good sport person or musician since have innate talent is one factor to get success and another main factor is hardworking.
On the other hand, this fact can not be overlooked that the individuals who have nature talents in certain fields can reach to success twice as fast as the other persons who do not have talents if they try to develop their talents and reinforce them. It is noticeable that if children who have talent in certain fields are taught how to use their talent as regards their fields little by little they can improve their talents in the straight way which would not be the case if they did pay most attention to their nature talents.
In conclusion, I believe that any children can be taught to become a good sports person or musician by hardworking but certain talents are prerequisite to getting successful and the children who have nature talents can become a good person in the certain fields such as sports or art in the short times.
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Sentence: In some cases if the individuals who has certain talents can not discover his/her talents or their family put them under tremendous pressure to forget their talents little by little they miss their innate talents which lead to they could not be able to become a good person according to his/her talent.
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Sentence: They can learned several techniques and skills by people who are well-known in their fields and they will be able to get success through their patience and hardworking.
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Sentence: There are several evidences to show that with hardworking and patience people can become a good sport person or musician since have innate talent is one factor to get success and another main factor is hardworking.
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Suggestion: Refer to since
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