The following appeared as a recommendation by a committee planning a ten year budget for the city of Calatrava The birthrate in our city is declining in fact last year s birthrate was only one half that of five years ago Thus the number of students enroll

In planning for a ten-year budget for the city of Calatrava, the committee claims that they will have enough money to fund city facilities and programs initially used by adults. Supporting their argument, they point out several facts regarding the birthrate of their city. However, careful inspection of these facts shows that none of them offers credible justification for the claim.

First of all, the committee reached the claim of declining birthrate on the basis of the mere fact that last year’s birthrate was half of what was five years ago. However, without knowing the birthrate of some other recent years, it is possible that the last year’s birthrate was actually an aberration, and in fact, the city might have faced an increasing birthrate in the other four years before last year. If this is the case, then the committee could not draw any firm claim on the basis of the birthrate.

Secondly, the committee reached a decision of reducing budgeted education and athletic funds relying on the declined birthrate in last year assuming that school enrollment will significantly decrease soon. But, last year’s low birthrate should not be affecting school and athletic enrollment since at least five or six years is needed for a child to be ready for school and athletics. In this case, they should be expecting any significant change in school and athletic enrollment, and the committee’s decision of cutting the budget for education and athletics might have a negative impact, making their claim unpersuasive.

In sum, the committee’s claim, as it stands, is flawed. To strengthen their argument they need to provide sufficient proof substantiating that the city’s birthrate is actually declining and Calatrava's adult population will soon increase. For a better assessment, I would also need to that whether the enrollment in school and athletics is declining

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actually, also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, at least, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 303.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25082508251 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80105680867 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524752475248 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0722729785 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.583333333 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.70786347227 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.444205649022 0.218282227539 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160102595835 0.0743258471296 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129715642667 0.0701772020484 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264148824118 0.128457276422 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101973935087 0.0628817314937 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 303 350
No. of Characters: 1537 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.172 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.073 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.7 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.955 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.638 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5