Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance from the screen (laptop, etc,..) and no need to watch it live. To what extent do you agree?
There is no room for doubt that as the 21st century unfold, the flourishing of technology with the emergence of many cutting-edge devices creates more choices for human life than ever, especially in the entertainment industry. Many people, who are fond of enjoying performances indirectly via some internet-based methods, believe that watching by their own eyes is unnecessary. In my viewpoints, I advocate that online watching in some ways can be deemed more flexible and comfortable, but attending a live performance brings about its own benefits.
On the one hand, it is understandable why, these days, more and more viewers would like to opt for screen-based devices as the best way of following entertaining channels. First and foremost, people can take pleasure in any concert whenever they want, as opposed to depending heavily on the time of performances. This point is rooted in the fact that most people, nowadays, have been living in a rush, and thus, their hectic lives and jam-packed schedules have not enabled them to freely join and revel in any show with a fixed and explicit timetable. Furthermore, watching movies, displays, concerts and suchlike through internet-based tools such as laptops, phones can be able to reduce a great deal of stress for traffic systems and some relevant public facilities like movie theatres, amusement centres and so forth. Concomitantly, numerous people having an interest in movies, for instance, can enjoy efficiently in a better way via the internet without feeling overwhelmed in crowded places.
On the other hand, I suppose that people, sometimes, need to attend a live performance because only by this way, they can truly exposure to the atmosphere among shows, the feeling of other audiences. Joining together in a show can make people enhance their social bonds as they could mutually and openly share their emotions and opinions. Besides, they can be likely to gain more joy, excitement and satisfaction thanks to the peer and domino effects, contributing to relieving working stress and the pressure from the rat race among spectators. Additionally, last but not least, people, when watching a live music show, can get an insight into the original voice of singers or celebrities since nowadays, a large number of vocalists have been misusing audio processors like audio-tune to perfect their voice and manipulate listeners through the internet.
In conclusion, on the basis of the above-mentioned arguments, despite the fact that many people regard watching performances for entertaining through high-tech devices as the most suitable method, humans can not devalue the advantages of attending directly a display can bring.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 706, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... singers or celebrities since nowadays, a large number of vocalists have been misusing audio proc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, if, so, thus, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 426.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31455399061 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95773530067 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 176.041082164 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598591549296 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.934479988 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.153846154 106.682146367 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7692307692 20.7667163134 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18736443795 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065365042518 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374179802495 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122563955136 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212495987214 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 78.4519038076 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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