In recent years we have seen a considerable rise in dangerous or extreme sports. This essay shall discuss some of the main reasons why people engage in such sports and suggest ways in which some risks involved in such sports can be reduced.
The main reason why people go for dangerous sports is that they get the thrill out of them. They like taking risks. They like to challenge their abilities and potentials. They feel a sense of satisfaction when they come face to face with fears while bungee jumping, rock climbing and so on. In addition, going through a dangerous experience gives them courage and confidence to face the hurdles of their daily life. Another reason for pursuing such sports is that there is a lot of fame and money involved in them. They get attention by doing stunts on motorcycles and jumping from tall buildings. They make headlines in newspapers and TV News Channels. They feel great when their name comes in the Guinness Book of World Records. Once they get famous they get a lot of money also. For instance, many businesses hire them to endorse their products. They also get jobs on the basis of such skills.
Many steps can be taken to reduce the risks are that involved. Firstly, these sports should be done under strict supervision. All safety precautions should be taken. Such sports should be performed after sufficient training and under supervision of adults. Sport companies which cater to such sports should require a license for providing such training. Some people suggest banning some sports. However, I do not believe that banning is a good solution. We all know that forbidden fruits taste sweeter and people will do such sports in hiding which would increase the risks involved.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, people do such sports for fun, for money and for fame. However, such sports should be performed after sufficient training from licensed companies and under some supervision.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...xtreme sports. This essay shall discuss some of the main reasons why people engage in such ...
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Line 2, column 171, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...allenge their abilities and potentials. They feel a sense of satisfaction when they ...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nes in newspapers and TV News Channels. They feel great when their name comes in the...
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Line 2, column 731, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... in the Guinness Book of World Records. Once they get famous they get a lot of money...
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...they get famous they get a lot of money also. For instance, many businesses hire the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, so, while, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85885885886 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43631470115 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534534534535 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.939944301 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.4166666667 106.682146367 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.875 20.7667163134 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95833333333 7.06120827912 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283815787845 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079514081035 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771038299277 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183527992602 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576837079331 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.0946893788 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 50.2224549098 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.3001002004 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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