Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go Suggest what yo

Dear Mr. Jones,

My child is studying in the fifth standard in your school, and I am writing this letter to show my interest in accompanying him on an educational trip to Canada organized by the school faculty. Being an artist, this trip to Canadian art galleries would further strengthen my knowledge about indigenous art and culture.

As I am on 3 weeks vacations, I can fully contribute to this trip and be a helping hand for the teaching staff during the whole journey. Being from the painting background, I can make students understand the significance of the paintings which they will see during this trip. Apart from that, I can be a great help in looking after student's basic needs, like food, hotel arrangement, and other security arrangements.

I would request you to enlighten me on the overall cost for an adult for this trip. Apart from that, if you can share venues of the art galleries which are planned for this trip, I can recommend some of the best hotels for accommodation.

I hope you would consider my request and allow me to be a part of this trip. I hope to hear back from you.

Kind Regards
Peter Parker

Votes
Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, then, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 937.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 201.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66169154229 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66887485613 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592039800995 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.7791781269 44.8134815571 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 4.34317383033 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193635504328 0.216113520407 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802682912531 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547251019218 0.0603063233224 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12809180734 0.12726935374 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442081459467 0.0580467560999 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.