The chart shows the percentage of industry sector contribution to be economy of India and Torkey in 2000

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The chart shows the percentage of industry sector contribution to be economy of India and Torkey in 2000.

The contribution of different industry sector to the grass economy of India and Torkey in 2000 is depicted in the given pie charts.
Overall,it is clear that expert in the care of health care of educon,the share of our other sectors showed variations between the year.
As seen in the first chart of India agriculture sector was the highest contribution to country of economy in 2000,and that was about a quarter of total share .On the other hand the late was made by contribution sector (3/)
When the comparison is made more critically, it is clear that four of the total mentioned sectors enhaced their share towards the economy by Torkey in 2000: of there,the construction sector stood first with the progress of more then thrice then that of India. The other 3 sectors ( manufacturing, business, finances) and trade utilities and transportation) led their dhare clay 4,3, and 2 respectively.
Timing toward the sector which last the grip agriculture sector for media stood at the top.while for Torkey it contributed 10/.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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The contribution of different industry secto...
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Suggestion:
...r of the total mentioned sectors enhaced their share towards the economy by Torke...
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...r stood first with the progress of more then thrice then that of India. The other ...
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...st with the progress of more then thrice then that of India. The other 3 sectors...
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...ore then thrice then that of India. The other 3 sectors manufacturing, business...
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Line 4, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...then that of India. The other 3 sectors manufacturing, business, finances and tr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 853.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98830409357 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80498220557 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561403508772 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.4926829268 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 139.762083556 43.030603864 325% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.6 112.824112599 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2 22.9334400587 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.23603664747 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389653377185 0.215688989381 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196258852685 0.103423049105 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140243655299 0.0843802449381 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215604149342 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117019133377 0.0819641961636 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.2329268293 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.4329268293 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.9970731707 142% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.0658536585 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The contribution of different industry secto...
^^
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f different industry sector to the grass economy of India and Torkey in 2000 is d...
^^
Line 2, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...picted in the given pie charts. Overall,it is clear that expert in the care of hea...
^^^
Line 2, column 69, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ert in the care of health care of educon,the share of our other sectors showed varia...
^^^^
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... that was about a quarter of total share .On the other hand the late was made by c...
^^
Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
...hat was about a quarter of total share .On the other hand the late was made by con...
^^
Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r of the total mentioned sectors enhaced their share towards the economy by Torke...
^^
Line 4, column 167, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... the economy by Torkey in 2000: of there,the construction sector stood first with th...
^^^^
Line 4, column 230, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...r stood first with the progress of more then thrice then that of India. The other ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 241, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...st with the progress of more then thrice then that of India. The other 3 sectors...
^^
Line 4, column 266, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ore then thrice then that of India. The other 3 sectors manufacturing, business...
^^
Line 4, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...then that of India. The other 3 sectors manufacturing, business, finances and tr...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 853.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98830409357 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80498220557 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561403508772 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.4926829268 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 139.762083556 43.030603864 325% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.6 112.824112599 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2 22.9334400587 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.23603664747 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389653377185 0.215688989381 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196258852685 0.103423049105 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140243655299 0.0843802449381 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215604149342 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117019133377 0.0819641961636 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.2329268293 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.4329268293 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.9970731707 142% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.0658536585 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.