10. University freshmen do not know much about university life and learning. There are two ways to help freshmen quickly enter university life, choose a method that you feel is better, and explain why.
1) attending a one-week orientation or introduction program before starting the classes
2) meeting regularly in your first year with a student in your major field who has attended the university for several years.
In South Korea, where the university education is largely different with the high school education system, proper information about the university life is greatly important to every freshmen of universities. Considering this factor of universities in Korea, this essay will argue in favor of the statement that university freshmen should acquire advises from their senior students and provide the rational reasons.
First of all, orientation or introduction program cannot provide sufficient information about the university’s programs to freshmen. This is because only one-week is too short to provide a number of information that students need. Also, because the orientation time is limited in the early of the semester of the first-year course, it cannot hold every aspects of the undergraduate program. Usually, most of undergraduate courses are consisted with 4-year courses, which greatly evolves as the students get higher courses. Therefore, sufficient information in every aspect of the courses is needed for the undergraduate students, and it is undoubted that only one-week course of the orientation cannot provide those of information.
Moreover, senior students can provide more helpful orientation to students who are freshmen, compared with the orientation. To be specific, orientation courses in the first semester tend to focus on formal information of the courses, such as academic information about the university’s faculty, which is not significant to students. By contrast, senior students who have the exceedingly useful information, such as the knowledge about the unknown standards of the university shcolarship, and the atmosphere of professors. By providing those of information greatly useful in the real-life at the university, it will help the fast adaptation of the freshmen students to the university environment.
In a nutshell, compared with the simple orientations that takes about a week, information from the senior students is more helpful to the university freshmen. Therefore, university have to focus on constructing the system that senior and freshmen students can interact each other easily; this will bring positive impacts on development of their students’ academic ability intensely.
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Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
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Suggestion: Moreover,
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62235649547 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01553859906 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429003021148 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 331.0 20.1344086022 1644% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1861.0 100.406767564 1853% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 331.0 20.6045352989 1606% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 63.0 5.45110844103 1156% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242235322272 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.242235322272 0.076458572812 317% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179951096212 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588522048999 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 170.5 11.7677419355 1449% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -281.41 58.1214874552 -484% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 134.7 10.1575268817 1326% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.8 10.9000537634 154% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 23.49 8.01818996416 293% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 66.0 10.002688172 660% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 134.4 10.0537634409 1337% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 135.0 10.247311828 1317% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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