Careers, the significant life choice, have been valued and even triggers heated discussions over the necessity of taking many jobs before a long-term one. Taking one job, in some people’s view, is beneficial for young people’s life because it is more stable. Compared to those people’s opinions is my perspective that trying different kinds of jobs have many advantages in both professional development and personal skills for young people, which lead to their success in the future.
What must be prioritized is that various jobs provide some essential benefits for young people in their professional development. To be more specific, the various forms of knowledge that students gained from class can be put into practice by experiencing different jobs. For example, a student who learned math, computer science, chemistry, and physics in his college, can obtain a better understanding of these diverse fields when he takes jobs as a math teacher, a programmer, a researcher in chemical industry. However, a student cannot know the practical use of the knowledge if he only chooses one job in his life.
What should be equally discussed is that beneficial personal development can be achieved in versatile jobs. In detail, fewer colleagues, customers, and leaders are available for young people to contact if they stay in one job. By contrast, young people get the chance to know different people in different companies with various background, by communicating and working with them, young people can hone their communication skills and enlarge their social circle. Take me as an example, I tried many different jobs after my graduation and I made many friends from different countries in each job and it boards my horizons by learning their cultures and languages, which are useful when I travel in other countries. Thus, several distinguished jobs experience will be crucial in our personal development by enlarging our social cycles and enhance our communications skills, which cannot be achieved by exclusively working in one job.
Jobs involving in diverse cultures, people and knowledge, are indispensable for our happiness and success in career. Several different jobs experience bring us many benefits that related to professional and personal development, nevertheless, these benefits are less likely received if young people only stay in one job in their life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...for our happiness and success in career Several different jobs experience bring us many benefits ...
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...eople only stay in one job in their life
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23733333333 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85750473899 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490666666667 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 375.0 20.1344086022 1862% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1964.0 100.406767564 1956% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 375.0 20.6045352989 1820% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 48.0 5.45110844103 881% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26353614102 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.26353614102 0.076458572812 345% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179624712307 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537180019132 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 190.8 11.7677419355 1621% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -309.15 58.1214874552 -532% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 149.5 10.1575268817 1472% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.59 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.9 8.01818996416 323% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 10.002688172 600% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 152.0 10.0537634409 1512% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 191.0 10.247311828 1864% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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