If you want to choose a purpose, which one do you
choose?
Helping other people
Enhancing time management
Improving physical well-being and eating healthy food
Nowadays, humankinds is encountered with a wide variety of disease and disorders such as cancers, nutrition deficients and so on. It is very critical and essential to take more attention and time to the health and well-being. I utterly agree with this notion that, the human should pay more attention on their health through sanitation and proper nutritional plan. I feel this way and explore it for the following reasons.
first and foremost reason to subtantiate my standpoint is that the human is desiring to increase life longevity. No can deny the role of well-being and consume nutritional food in the life expectancy process. According to scientific investigation of medical physicians and nutritional speciallist, in some prosper and affluent countries that the people are more likely to utilize healthy food and more care about sanitation, the life expectency is nearly 75-87 years. Meanwile, in deprivileged countries were evaulated significantly less than 60 years. Should government and people have a health life style through health nutrion and checking health status reguraly during their lifetime, they will have a prosper and happy life without pain and concern regarding their well-being.
In the second reason to corroborating my viewpoint, if the human pay more attention through more invesment on their health and well-being, they will successful to other puropse better such time management and helping to others. without a vigorous and health body, the person can not helo to other people because he already can not satisfy own needs with a sick body. Meanwhile, even worse, an unhealth person can not manage own time because sometimes a disorder could disturbe routine and important activity and schedule. My own example is compeling evidence to fustfiy this matter. When I was a graduate studnet, I was take more time on my thesis and research with enough attention to my health at that time to reach my goals as soon as possible. Currently, I am suffered with physical problemas such as muscle spasticity and neck pain which was caused delay to reach my plan on time. Had I provided more pay attention to my health through high-quality food and excersise, regular check up. I will meet my desire on time without any pains and disorder.
To reach an comprehensive conclusion, paying more attention on foods, health would lead me to a proseper and effective lifestyle which I could reach to other purpose such as helping to people and time-management. Moreover, I will have more life expectancy with less pain and suffer from disorder that I could prevent it in the past by some facile steps.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, well, while, i feel, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00699300699 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71958352638 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496503496503 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 429.0 20.1344086022 2131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2148.0 100.406767564 2139% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 429.0 20.6045352989 2082% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 72.0 5.45110844103 1321% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102799735787 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102799735787 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0638198182434 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367099811053 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 216.7 11.7677419355 1841% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -363.96 58.1214874552 -626% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 170.6 10.1575268817 1680% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.26 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 28.67 8.01818996416 358% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 10.002688172 560% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 173.6 10.0537634409 1727% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 10.247311828 283% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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