TPO 52
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The rules that society today expects young people to follow and obey have been changed over time. This is related to the role of young people in today's society. I grant that there are many opinions about this topic; however, I disagree with the statement that the rules that young people have to follow and obey today are too strict. I feel this way for mainly two reasons that I will explain in the following essay.
Firstly, the power of teachers in classrooms is becoming weaker than before. These days, teachers cannot make their students follow the rules strictly because students and their parents immediately complain to the national education committee about the teacher's attitude when they strictly scold their students. This means that students these days do not have to follow strict rules at school. To make the point vivid, I will introduce the story that my cousin, Ken, told me two years ago. When he was in elementary school, one of his classmates always disturbing the class by making noise. The teacher in his class scolded him strictly and told him not to make the noise; however, he did not accept the instruction. He told his parents the affairs of the school. And his parent's complaints about his teachers' instruction to the national education committee. The committee told the teacher to stop scolding him. Consequently, the student did not stop making noise in classes.
Next, parents stopped making their children follow the strict rules at home. These days birth rates in developed countries are decreasing. This is because the cost of raising children is increasing. In this situation, parents tend to overprotect and sometimes spoil their children. This means that children do not have to obey strict rules not only at school but also at home. For example, my father told me that he had often been hit by his grandfather when he broke the family rule or he could not get good grades at school. He told me that he had been afraid of this punishment, so he had had no choice but to follow the rules. Additionally, he told me that it had been taken for granted to be hit by parents at that time. I also have opportunities to be scolded by my parents, of course, but my parents have not hit me. This story really surprised me.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that the rules that young people have to follow and obey are not so strict. This is because teachers cannot make their students obey some strict rules, and parents are becoming kinder to their children than before.
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- TPO 43 Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion which of the following is the best thing to do Interrupt and correct the mistake right away Wait until the class or meeting 60
- TPO 46 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 60
- TPO 51 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 61
- TPO 44 Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate 60
- TPO 47 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
... national education committee about the teachers attitude when they strictly scold their...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, really, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76781609195 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4186049466 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420689655172 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7423238169 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.7692307692 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7307692308 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11538461538 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197045859464 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677211955886 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101550264861 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176037586812 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135199683759 0.0645574589148 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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