Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The following memorandum is from the manager of Bagel Mania Bakery.
Recently Bagel Mania replaced sugar with saccharin, a sugar substitute, throughout its bakeries in the Northeast areas of the USA. Contrary to initial expectations, this change did not have an adverse impact on our customer's preferences. So far, only 10 percent of our customers have grumbled about this change suggesting that an average of 90 customers out 100 have no issues with the use of saccharin in our baked products. Since our customers have not voiced great concern about the use of saccharin instead of sugar, it is evident that we should implement this change in all the branches of Bagel Mania bakeries in rest of the country.
The author of the memorandum suggests that, Bagal Mania replesed sugar with saccharin, throuhout its bakery in the northan areal if USA. By doing so, it did not had any complains against it and so far on average 90 out of 100 customers does not have any issues about it. Thus, the authore suggests to replace sugar with saccharin in all the branches of Bagal Manina bakeries in the rest of the cuntry. At first glance, the memorandum might seem correct, but this mighr not be the case. After scrutenizing, we might see many unwarrented assumorions and statements which does not have any supporting proof. Thus the memorendum does not hold water.
To start with, the bakery replaces sugar with saccharin, the reason behind this replacemrnt action is not stated. By doing so, if saccharin does not complement the begals produce and might have several side effects or allergic reactions on the individual who conusmes the product. Also, the use of saccharin might prove ingurious to the dibetic patients. None of these critical porblems are answered. So the problems need to be answering, in a form of scientific experiments, before implementation of the change.
According to the statestics, 90 out of 100 customers do not have any issue with this replacement. But, do the customers actually know that the product they are consuming contains saccharin in them. Also, the consumers might not aware about what the substance or how it might affect their body.
Additionally, this replacement is taken place only in the northan areal of USA and the prompt suggest that to implement this change throught the country. On what basis this conclusion is made, there is no sustential evidence about the behaviour or likeing of the replacement product around the country. As the statistics is based only on the northern part of the USA. The prefferd taste and flavours might not be the same throughout the country, a perticualr dish might be the faviorate in certain region but might be hated or criticised in another part of the country. Therefore, due to lack of evidence we cannot implement the change throughout the country.
In conclusion, the memorsandum has several flaws and unstatd assumptions which need to be answered before comeing to any kind of conclusions
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 30 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1837 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.873 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.691 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.828 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...n areal if USA. By doing so, it did not had any complains against it and so far on ...
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Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests replacing'.
Suggestion: suggests replacing
... any issues about it. Thus, the authore suggests to replace sugar with saccharin in all the branche...
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Line 1, column 519, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e case. After scrutenizing, we might see many unwarrented assumorions and stateme...
^^
Line 1, column 607, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ich does not have any supporting proof. Thus the memorendum does not hold water. ...
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Line 7, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...replacement product around the country. As the statistics is based only on the nor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, kind of, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02122015915 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76383917753 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535809018568 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7113019177 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.65 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.85 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0176626989542 0.218282227539 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00594570703627 0.0743258471296 8% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0103323300402 0.0701772020484 15% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0121416009773 0.128457276422 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0106354768368 0.0628817314937 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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