The linegraph illustrate the information about language options selected by 13 year old students in a school in England.It's about 2 languages: French and Mandarin from 2000 to present.Overall,the linegraph was also noted the number of students enjoy studying French and Mandarin.However,the increase about the number of studying French more then studying Mandarin
Unfortunately,there is a few students study Mandarin and mostly students study French in 2000.Between 2001 and 2002,there are more than 10 students enjoy studying Mandarin and the students study French started to decrease about 10 students.At the time about 2003 to 2005,the students enjoy studying Mandarin more common than upon a time and the students has a low point about 90 participants.
Interestingly,the student study French and Mandarin was also equivalent that this linegraph shown the number of study this 2 languages sometimes go up and down between 2006 to 2009.The time at 2010 to present,the French still decrease and the Mandarin still increase a few students.However,the students like to improve the French language.Both students leveled off and was inspired to study these 2 languages.
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...rench and Mandarin from 2000 to present.Overall,the linegraph was also noted the number...
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... Mandarin still increase a few students.However,the students like to improve the French...
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...nts like to improve the French language.Both students leveled off and was inspired t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 995.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58988764045 4.92477711251 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.55054846392 2.65546596893 134% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494382022472 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 284.4 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 8.94146341463 22% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 89.0 22.4926829268 396% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 174.0 43.030603864 404% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 497.5 112.824112599 441% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 89.0 22.9334400587 388% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.0 5.23603664747 286% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26774060608 0.215688989381 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20907307901 0.103423049105 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0938967278506 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205525181087 0.15604864568 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717737294796 0.0819641961636 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 49.4 13.2329268293 373% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -18.86 61.2550243902 -31% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 38.0 10.3012195122 369% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.33 11.4140731707 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.8 8.06136585366 134% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 11.4329268293 481% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 37.6 10.9970731707 342% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 38.0 11.0658536585 343% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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