The bar graph describes the number of male and female joined a different courses at an adult education center in 2009, where as the pie chart provide an information of ages of appricants for those courses in percentage.
Overall, the number of female dominated their counterpart in majority of courses, while the ratio of attendance for this classes was from oldest age group.
To begin with, women attendance in all the classes was more except sculpture classes. Specifically, there were twice as many female in language and drama classes as male with numbers accounting 20 and 40 for respective classes. Similarly, 30 women attended painting classes, where the number was higher by 5 compare to men.
The highest proportion of people among them were more than 50 years old with ratio of just over two fifth. Following this, almost a quarter of them were in the age group of 40 to 49. Approximately one in ten students in evening classes were 20 to 29 years old, which was double compared to those who were under 20 uears and 5% less than that of 30-39 years old.
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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: Cowy
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'course'?
Suggestion: course
...r of male and female joined a different courses at an adult education center in 2009, w...
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Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...s at an adult education center in 2009, where as the pie chart provide an information of...
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Line 2, column 117, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...rses, while the ratio of attendance for this classes was from oldest age group. To...
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Line 2, column 134, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'from the oldest'.
Suggestion: from the oldest
...atio of attendance for this classes was from oldest age group. To begin with, women atten...
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Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'compare' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'compares'.
Suggestion: compares
...asses, where the number was higher by 5 compare to men. The highest proportion of peo...
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Line 4, column 101, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'fifth' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'fifths'.
Suggestion: fifths
...0 years old with ratio of just over two fifth. Following this, almost a quarter of th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, similarly, while, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 882.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74193548387 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55301064173 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623655913978 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 271.8 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1665930506 43.030603864 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.25 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.23603664747 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244540637165 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096127827858 0.103423049105 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105600182115 0.0843802449381 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146508324572 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120450822497 0.0819641961636 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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