You visited a theatre last week with your friend Your friend had a small accident Write a letter to the manager of the theatreExplain the accidentHow a staff helpedHow can the manager make sure nothing of this sort happens again

Dear Sir / Madam,
I am writing in order to bring to your attention an unfortunate event that took place in your store last week. I would also like to make some suggestions so as this can be avoided in the future.
I attended the Coco and Bean coffee shop located in Griffith, where I regularly consume a coffee in the morning before work. While I was ordering my coffee, I noticed that the staff were under a lot of pressure due to high volume of customers. When I was given my coffee and I sipped it, I burnt my tongue severely. In this occasion, I had to attend the emergency department which led me to incur in medical costs and also physical pain.
I would like to make a suggestion to prevent this accident from happening in the future. I believe that you could acquire a thermometer to measure the temperature of the coffee to 70 degrees and avoid future accidents.
I hope these suggestions help other customers and the business to provide a high-quality service.
Yours sincerely,
Agustina Ciarla.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... degrees and avoid future accidents. I hope these suggestions help other custo...
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...igh-quality service. Yours sincerely, Agustina Ciarla.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 180.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68926305355 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4110523443 44.8134815571 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.9 4.34317383033 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150650094056 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547862265559 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530782271026 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0794075070881 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720922735939 0.0580467560999 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.