Nowadays, there is a considerable increase in the number of the young, this means the figure for elder people is significant lower. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this trend, I believe that these are outweighed by the advantages.
On the one hand, there are some major drawbacks when the number of young people surpass the number of the old. The first drawback is rising in unemployment adults due to the fact that there are too many people compete for a limited position at work. Meanwhile, the older people have had their own bussiness figured out and do not have to worry about seeking for job, instead, they will have time for social activities which contribute significantly to communities. The second disadvantage is the increase in the young’s stress level. This is because younger people lack of obvious experience that may cause them trouble at work.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. Firstly, fewer older people mean decresse in the amount of money spent for community welfare. Having said that, old people are the ones who need pension, health care and other social problems which considerably consume government’s budget. Secondly, the young are hidden key for national’s economy because of large amount of money in taxes. It is also because the young can work for a longer time compared to the older who are exhausted within some hours. Finally, young adults are turning their nations into innovative and smart countries. The youth are familiar with technology, which is one of the crucial part of developed nations, moreover, they are creative and imaginative, therefore, benefits the developing countries in terms of making progress.
In conclusion, I would argue that the appearance of so many young people and fewer older one brings more benefits than drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 644, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...novative and smart countries. The youth are familiar with technology, which is one ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15231788079 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73995368009 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569536423841 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1171767297 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.733333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28781824198 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920254900209 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581572401113 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171834000658 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630217486856 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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