Writing task 1 (a letter)
You have recently bought a TV and it arrived damaged. Write a letter to the store manager and say:
- When and what TV did you buy?
- Describe the damage.
- How can the issue be solved in your opinion?
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter to express dissatisfaction of damaged TV which I had bought from your shop yesterday.
The power button on the television is broken unable to switch on the television Due to this I can switch on TV only with the remote control. In addition, the sound of the television is very poor quality. Background noise awkward to listen while watching the television. Moreover, When I was shown the color of the TV was light green but the delivered product is in dark green color.
I was frustrated since I had paid the full amount for the new television but unable to watch the television. Please replace the television as soon as possible with correct color with excellent quality or else refund my money I would return the television. Hope you will understand the problem caused by the product. I am a regular customer of this shop. So please take action immediately waiting for your immediate response.
Yours faithfully,
Jonn Wilson
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Comments
Thanks, I will check the
Thanks, I will check the error
I had rewritten some of the two verb sentence.
Background noise awkward while listening to the television.
I selected light green colored television, but the delivered product was in dark green color.
awkward is not a
awkward is not a verb.
Definitions of awkward
adjective
causing difficulty; hard to do or deal with.
one of the most awkward jobs is painting a ceiling
synonyms: difficult, tricky, cumbersome, unwieldy; inconvenient, inappropriate, inopportune, unseasonable, difficult
causing or feeling embarrassment or inconvenience.
he had put her in a very awkward situation
synonyms: embarrassing, uncomfortable, unpleasant, delicate, tricky, problematic, troublesome, thorny, humiliating, compromising, sticky, dicey, hairy; uncomfortable, uneasy, tense, nervous, edgy, unquiet, self-conscious, embarrassed
not smooth or graceful; ungainly.
Luther's awkward movements impeded his progress
synonyms: clumsy, ungainly, uncoordinated, graceless, inelegant, gauche, gawky, wooden, stiff, u
thanks I understood that
thanks I understood that wrong usage of adjective instead verb.
The power button on the television is broken unable to switch
The power button on the television is broken and unable to switch
the sound of the television is very poor quality.
the sound of the television has a very poor quality.
Background noise awkward to listen while watching the television.
Description: what is the verb for this sentence? can you re-write this sentence?
When I was shown the color of the TV was light green
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
with correct color with excellent quality
with correct color and excellent quality
So please take action immediately waiting for your immediate response.
So please take action immediately. and I am waiting for your immediate response.
flaws:
Do you check out your essays after finished essay writing? You always have same issues.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 10
No. of Words: 167 200
No. of Characters: 784 1000
No. of Different Words: 105 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.595 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.695 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.633 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 56 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.729 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.633 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4