It is clearly understood that in such a sophisticated world, choosing a career, is a very important issue for everyone, especially for young people, and children. Some people believe is much easier for children to choose their parent's jobs, and learn most of the skills from them, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, is very necessary for children, and the youngest people to follow their dreams. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that parents should encourage their children to find their interests, and choose their goals. After that, they should try to proper everything for their children, and let them take a risk in their lives. Sometimes children's goals could be much with their parent's job, and sometimes not, but the important point which should be taken into consideration is that children should pick their future jobs by themselves. For example, my parents always let me choose everything by myself, I have to think about everything, and pick them correctly. After that when I grew up I chose my major in university and followed my dream until now. My parents always encourage me on this path, and when I need them, they stand behind me, to support me as ever, and because of that I believe nowadays I become a successful person in my life.
Another reason which should be taken into consideration is that when children choose their future job by themselves if they make a wrong mistake in this path, they would be responsible for that action, and never blame their parent for choosing that job. Another example that I should mention is that my cousin never could decide for himself, and when he want to choose a job, his parent decided to he keeping his fathers job, but he never like that job, so after a while, he bankrupt, and become very depressed. He always blames his family for this situation, and never forgave them. Nowadays he trying to start a new life by choosing a new job, but he has this feeling that he wasted his time, and he does not have that much courage to take new risks in his life.
To put it briefly, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that everyone should follow their dreams and their goals. Whit these circumstances we could be happy in our life, and feel satisfied every time. We should try to be happy, and the first step in this path depends on our choice, so is very necessary for everyone to follow their dream. In fact, there is a myriad of other reasons, supporting the above statement, which could be mentioned but is not embraced due to the dearth of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 354, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...r could decide for himself, and when he want to choose a job, his parent decided to ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to the keeping'?
Suggestion: to the keeping
...ant to choose a job, his parent decided to he keeping his fathers job, but he never like that...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'keeps'.
Suggestion: keeps
... choose a job, his parent decided to he keeping his fathers job, but he never like that...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, first, if, so, whereas, while, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 87.0 43.0788530466 202% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70401691332 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53054676628 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469344608879 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 19.0 1.86738351254 1017% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.2127724006 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.611111111 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2777777778 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348623566479 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11082788243 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877560558486 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205408106988 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631595740369 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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