With the down of humanity, human beings have done a quite many attempts to eleiminate poverty from the society however, this desire has remained yet to be achieved. On that ground, the government is said to be responsible to provide them a findamental standard of life and be a back bone for them financially. In this reagrd, a plethora of people possesses the conviction that olders should be supported financially while others look this concept through a different lens. They contend that governemnt should support families who have young children or workers who have lost their jobs. Certianly, from my vantage point, the former view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite reason to be mentiones is that even though the government has extensive crucial responsibilities to look for in the country, oldres are at the peak for neccesity for financial help. This is mainly because they are not financial independant citizens, and even if they want to work and be an independent, their fragile health would not support them to work like other youngesters. Beside, their savings might be all used up within few years, and consequently, they do not left with any saving if they live longer. Indeed, considering all these circumstences, the government should sincerely take step to provide financial help to old age human beings. To shed more light on this, my country’s example is utterly a compelling example of what has been elaborated above. The government in my country, have come up with retirement plan last year whereby every senior citizens are able to received $2000 each month in order to meet with their basic requirements. What is more, they get their health treatments in free of cost anywhere in the government hospitals. Thus, it is judicious to say that life of older people would be really peasant if the government take steps to support them financially.
Another noteworthy point striking in my mind is that helping to seniors will indirectly beneficial to the government itself. To be more specific, people work progressively if they have motivations in the life. In other words, if olders are provided retirement perks and pension benefits, it would indirectly encourage and enforce young individuals to at their best efficiency to serve their own’s contry since they will be benefited during their retirement lives by the government where they live in. On the contrary, in opposite scenario, it is likely that young crown would migrate to other countries in order to take senior citizen perks, and the country have to lose their brilient people. A date statistics collected from empirical study that is conducted at the University of California indicates that approximately 78% young individiuals of Egypt migrated to the United States last years due the fact that they did not find getting any benefits once they become senior citizen. Ultimately, this enforces me that providing fund to old people is singificant in order to motivate young generation to work for the country life-long.
Admittedly, I cannot find any major needs of helping with money for families who have young children or jobless people. First of all, in the current era, wife and husband both works to live a life. On top of that, the government provide free education to children in the government school. Thus, they do not need extra financial help. Now, considering jobless individuals, I would say that they might have saved enough whereby they can survive for few weeks, and in reality, it is not difficult to find another job they they find one vigoursly. It can have negative consequences by providing jobless financial help because they might be habituated of getting money even without working and they might not want to work anymore. Thus. it can directly hamper the conutry’s economy. Hence, it is not a wise idea to give financial aid to those group of people.
To recapitulate, from contemplating all remarks, in spite of the fact that some may not agree with my viewpoint, I implicitly believe that eleders deserve to be helped financially. This is becasue it is hard for them to work at this age, and apaprently, it provide boost up to young folk to work hard for their own country.
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- TOEFL T P O 21 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Reading passage An airship is a type of aircraft that flies using a very large balloon filled with a lighter than air gas Airships were an important means of air transportation before the 1940s but are little used today having been largely replaced by air 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: they
...it is not difficult to find another job they they find one vigoursly. It can have negativ...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...nd they might not want to work anymore. Thus. it can directly hamper the conutry’s e...
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Suggestion: It
...y might not want to work anymore. Thus. it can directly hamper the conutry’s econo...
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Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, may, really, so, thus, while, first of all, in other words, in spite of, on the contrary, what is more, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 102.0 52.1666666667 196% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3647.0 1977.66487455 184% => OK
No of words: 716.0 407.700716846 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09357541899 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.17283059074 4.48103885553 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78335206239 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 350.0 212.727598566 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488826815642 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1115.1 618.680645161 180% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 16.0 4.94265232975 324% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7273434497 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.566666667 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253614062241 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706872222415 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615121553313 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148631888575 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369007766662 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 86.8835125448 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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