The number of crimes committed by youngsters has been increased at an alarming rate in many parts of the world and this is one of the pressing issues. Some people believe that the same punishments should be enacted for both young and adult criminals. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this statement to some extent.
On the one hand, proponents of this claim assume that heavy punishments offer a higher deterrence to those intending to have wrongdoings at all ages. This measure might prevent children from turning into crime because they will receive a severe judgement from the court. Moreover, children’s discipline should be taught strictly. A great number of older generations, these days, are grateful to their parents and teachers for educating them in a traditional way, including the use of a cane. As a result, most of them have become disciplinary citizens who devote themselves to building a better country.
On the other hand, I believe that as in modern society, treating young people as heavily as adults shows little positive effect and might pose detrimental consequences to individuals and society at large. The first reason is that many adolescent criminals had suffered domestic violence during their childhood and without an appropriate education they desperately turn into crime. This problem can be seen in Brazil where children are not only the main culprits for petty robbery but also the victims of violent abuse. Secondly, young citizens are not mature enough. Because of their age, they have not completed the whole psychological development. As a result, they usually have wrongful thoughts against the laws which leave negative impacts on societal security.
In conclusion, young people play an important role in the later development of every nation so that they must be raised and treated wisely and carefully. I believe that applying punishments for adults to youngers is obsolete and inappropriate. Every government should enact laws banning domestic violence and allocate resources to educational purposes for children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a traditional way" with adverb for "traditional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...parents and teachers for educating them in a traditional way, including the use of a cane. As a resu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, moreover, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30182926829 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80169324758 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4821427374 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.294117647 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2941176471 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20916511504 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565556130865 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051165970397 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126039547565 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065299169078 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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