The graph below compares figures for the production and consumption of energy in the US from 1950 to 2000. It also predicts figures for 2025.
The following line graph provides the comparison of the relationship between the actual demand and supply of energy in the US between 1995 and 2000 as well as the prediction up to 2025.
In 1950, the energy between consumption and production was rather close, had approximate 30 units each. After then, the sharply rising trends of each achieved around 60 in 1975, which was doubled at that moment. During the following period of 1975-2000, the energy consumption climbed steeply with more severe fluctuation than the supply and conducted a rather larger amount in 2000 as over three times more than the one in 1950. On the other hand, the energy production had quite minor raise as 65.
According to the previous tendency from 1950 to 2000, there would be the continuous increase in both consumption and production while the obvious situation is the consumption is expected to go up with a significant speed to 140 by 2025, the production still cannot catch up with it. Up to 2025, the consumption will be nearly one and half times more than the production.
In conclusion, the graph provides us the imported energy will last to satisfy the lace of production.
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The following line graph
The following line graph provides the comparison of the relationship between the actual demand and supply of energy in the US between 1995 and 2000 as well as the prediction up to 2025.
Description: can you re-write this sentence? Try to put it in two sentences.
Rewrite here -----> The following line graph provides the comparison of the relationship between the actual demand and supply of energy in the US between 1995 and 2000. Besides, it provide the prediction up to 2025 as well.
Would it be better? tks!
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'Up to 2025, the consumption will be nearly one and half times more than the production.'
the graph provides us the imported energy will last to satisfy the lace of production.
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
----> Is it ok if I just eliminated 'Up to 2025, the consumption will be nearly one and half times more than the production.'.
And, I rewrite the last paragraph as this way----> As from the graph shew, the consumption will grow much faster than the production by 2025. Hence, the energy will still be unavoidably imported as to satisfy the lack of production in future.
Tks a lot... tks again!
'No math in task I' means:
'No math in task I' means: don't put calculations in task I, like '1.5 times' because the examiners may not understand math.
the graph provides us the imported energy which will last to satisfy the lace of production.
The following line graph provides the comparison of the relationship between the actual demand and supply of energy in the US between 1995 and 2000 as well as the prediction up to 2025.
Description: can you re-write this sentence? Try to put it in two sentences.
the energy between consumption and production was rather close, had approximate 30 units each
the energy between consumption and production was rather close, approximate 30 units each
while the obvious situation is the consumption is expected to go up
while the obvious situation is that the consumption is expected to go up
the graph provides us the imported energy will last to satisfy the lace of production.
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No math in task I:
'Up to 2025, the consumption will be nearly one and half times more than the production.'
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 198 200
No. of Characters: 943 1000
No. of Different Words: 110 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.751 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.763 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.646 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 64 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 42 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.83 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.439 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.717 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4